Jason O'Connell
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1. Thanks so much, Dream! It means a lot to hear you say this. And yes, I do use "damm" a lot in the story, though it's about the same frequency as in the shows.Just got caught up on the journeys of Captain Fredricks, and after 11 episodes, I am left with two thoughts: 1) they are certainly as engaging as most of the Trek episodes I have seen, and I have seen them all, and you are getting better with character development and overall dialog as it progresses. 2) I have finally found the person who uses "Damm" in their stories more often than I do. Kudos, darn it.
The new bartender/councilor character is great, as more problems can be solved sitting on a stool than laying on a couch, an old Irish proverb attests. That probably comes from the fact that there's more barrooms closer to churches than psychiatrist offices. Or so I hear.
I assume you are taking writing courses in school, if you aren't, I would seriously think about it. We need a few good sci fi writers in Hollywood, most of the ones we have now are a bit lacking in quality, save for the Marvel franchise, which kicks Ferengi butt-like head.
I see 12 is now up, I haven't gotten a chance to sit down to read yet, but looking forward to it. Great job, Jason, and keep em coming! More...Ernie...more...Ernie...more...Ernie...
2. I assume the character you're referring to is Crusoe, who is actually not a new character. I've just never really given him such a large part before.
3. I'm actually studying computer programming in college, and do writing as a hobby. On the flip side, I am noob when it comes to actually reading stuff.
4. I definitely intend to do more with Ernie. I've got rough outlines written for the next two episodes; one of which may feature him prominently.
I also believe that episode 12 added more depth to Lenerea and Tala's characters.